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Old 09-06-18   #154
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Default Re: BartmanHomer's creative writing and discussions

I like the chapter. However, I would advise to start lengthening them. This way you can have longer conversations with the characters. You also might think of inserting character thoughts, what the characters are thinking before they respond to a question or to the other character they are talking to.
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